55- er

Posted: June 8, 2010 in Uncategorized

Hi My first ever attempt to write one .. Hope its  goood enough.. please do tell me πŸ™‚

The Day came, surprisingly sun rose pretty early, birds chirping, singing
People around him just not moving fast enough.
He was in a rush to leave- to reach
Time was ticking
The day when he will lose all freedom, chained, locked

He laughed β€œSHAHEED hone ja raha hoon”
Sat on GHODI with friends dancing around
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  1. Insignia says:

    Now I can definitely and surely confirm that you are having your jitters. 55-er sab likhne lage aap :-)Khoob!!! πŸ˜€

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  2. sangeeta says:

    Hmmmmph!! Men and their (sic!) commitment phobias!!Well put Bikram πŸ™‚

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  3. BK Chowla, says:

    Great effort. I hope , one day I can try 55er

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  4. smitzy says:

    HAHAHAHAHAHAHA this was awesome!! πŸ˜€ aww someone's having jitters.. koi na do shot whiskey ki maar ke jana, everything will seem hunky dory πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜›

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  5. Bedlam says:

    Bahut achche.. real lyf πŸ˜›

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  6. Tulika says:

    Mast!Nice read..! πŸ™‚

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  7. Neha says:

    not at all a bad attempt Bikram.. :)) good luck for ghodi chadne ke din ke liye πŸ˜€

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  8. kavita says:

    55ers ke chak de phattee !!Nice one Bikram !Bikram, please when you chado ghodi,please do it in India…hum bhi shariq honge !

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  9. hahaha shaheed hona accha hain πŸ™‚ nice one!

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  10. *Harman* says:

    ..good goin… ..its good to be committed… and settled down once n for all….trust me on that!!!good luck

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  11. rohini says:

    good attempt…..i never thought of attemting this….well all the best for the process….

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  12. Very true…last few moments of freedom…nicely narrated short saying….:P

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  13. wise donkey says:

    lol nice, very nice:)

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  14. karan a says:

    It is difficult to express with limiting words. You did a nice work!

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  15. Lol. Bachoo, shaadi ka ladoo kha kar shaheed ho rahe ho.:D

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  16. Madhu says:

    55 err? it was a good attempt..but the word "shaheed ho raha hoon" gave away the climax..i guessed it..boys will never change!

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  17. Jas Sekhon says:

    paaji dance will come only after darooo… and as we know YOURS is finished Boooo hooooooo πŸ™‚ Yeah i made it public just in case you go and get some more ….

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  18. Jas Sekhon says:

    Shaheed hone ja raha hoon OK.. right we shall celebrate is as SHAHEEDI DIWAS πŸ™‚

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  19. Shas says:

    Liked the idea of Jas Sekhon of celebrating it as SHAHEEDI DIWAS :DGood one for a first timer :)Keep it up!

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  20. Sandhya says:

    β€œSHAHEED hone ja raha hoon” – Laddu deke jaanaji!Good attempt!

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  21. Bikramjit says:

    @Insignia:- Trying my hand at all.. maybe I will be good in something .. trying to find out what that is .. and hey you are first .. kamaal ho gaya πŸ™‚ and No Jitters believe me he he AAAANE DO πŸ™‚ Write this 55er did have Jitter though@Cute Priya:- Shukriya@SAngeeta:- lai what do you mean commitment phobia.. πŸ™‚ thanks for liking it yeah trying for first time ..

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  22. Bikramjit says:

    @Chowla Sir:- yeah please do try , If i can do I bet anyone can .. Thank you for appreciation..@Smitzy :- DO shot laga to loon.. but yeh pata nahin na ki DO shot ke baad ROK sakoonga ki nahin .. kahin pata chala aadhi bottle policshed fir kya ghodi or kya ghoda ha ha ha πŸ™‚ @Bedlam :- Shukriya.. yeah real lyf not reeel lyf :P@Tulika :- Thanks for the appreciation

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  23. Bikramjit says:

    @Neha :- Thanks a ton.. aapne comment kiya Balle balle ho gayi πŸ™‚ now going back to your article on ways to be popular .. I shud ask you a question he he he .. Thank you for the good luck I wud need it by the sounds of it ha ha ha @Kavita :- Chakk te fatte haanji .. thanks a lot. Definitely ji you are more then welcome Thank you@Gayathri:- haanji acha hai to hai.. thank you thank you :)@HArman:- You speaking from experience then πŸ™‚ .. yes indeed it is beautiful .. hopefully touch wood πŸ™‚ @Rohini :- Thank you .. aap bhi kijiye .. @Baljinder:- thanks for the comment and visiting my blog.. please do again…

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  24. Bikramjit says:

    @Wise Donkey:- Thank you so much.@KAran a :- yeah i know , i never tried it earlier .. thanks for liking it .. @The holy lama :- he hehe he acha hai na .. meetha to khaya na .. he he he πŸ™‚ @MAdhu:- ab boy kahan MAN ho gaya hoon.. thanks for liking it .. you are clever πŸ™‚

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  25. Bikramjit says:

    @Sekhon:- daroo no chinta.. Morrisons 3 for Β£18 man.. and lots more in the garage πŸ™‚ you get ready to have your fill πŸ™‚ and shaheedi diwas de bachiya tera V ho gaya hai na ha hahaha:) @Shas :- Sekhon is MAD .. he is talking of his experience .. Thank you so much for appreciating .. Now i can bore you all with MORE πŸ™‚ @Sandhya :- yeah no problems LOTS Of laddo kaunse waale motichoor or normal or khoya ke wagerah wagerah thanks .

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  26. Phoenixritu says:

    Lovely one! LOL! Wedding gift for you on my blog

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  27. R. Ramesh says:

    Thanks danke merci danyavad nanri shukran shukriya….

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  28. A says:

    Very nice πŸ™‚ Funny :)Just make only one attempt for 'Shaihidi' – that is enough…you can of course write more and more…

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  29. Bikramjit says:

    @Ramesh:- thanks @A:- yeah just one attempt my friend.. i dont think there would be a chance of a SECOND chance after the First one πŸ™‚ he he he

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  30. pal says:

    LOL!!!Though, I don't understand why men want to even get married, if they are so critical of it!!!

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  31. Bikramjit says:

    @Pal:- he hehe its the same as men cant understand women.. πŸ™‚

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  32. Shaheed hona bahut acha hai πŸ™‚

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